The string of events that brought me here is long and nonsensical. But here we are.
- Step 1: Decide that maybe an 8k word long short story after the climactic events of your story is mildly disruptive.
- Step 2: Decide to replace it with a 'prophetic'/poetic analysis to clarify your complicated-ass plot
- Step 3: Because this is the first time you've actually thought about this poem, realize that it would be cooler if "X hurts Y, X spares Y" would be cooler as "X hurts Y, Y spares X"
- Step 4: Consult ridiculous timeline table to see if your five sets of hypotheticals supports this (weirdly enough, it does)
- Step 5: Realize you now have to rewrite the poem that you vomited at the beginning and hoped for the best.
- Step 6: In an act of sheer masochism, decide to rewrite it in meter.
Long has it presided over our age of discordance And will not wither til its seed returns aflame To take root in earth unstained by blood From its renewal blooms the flood That sweeps away the walls in which our discontent is sequestered To kindle in all the mercy that spared it
The unwithering crown, it long awaits Its seed returns from wounded flame Hurt withheld, its roots unstained. From renewal will bloom and free by flood Our discontent, remade, unwalled What spared it: mercy, kindled in all
Better, I think, because of the meter. And definitely good enough to go back to not thinking about this at all.